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posted on 2004-7-7 at 19:51
shawnL.biz
i finished a little site yesterday, it can be seen at www.shawnl.biz. it's just a little 4-page thing. what do you think?
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posted on 2004-7-7 at 20:45
I like it.
Just constructive criticism...(for more professional little details I guess)
Where it says: Please feel free to browse the site, learn more about Shawn and ShawnL Productions and email us with any questions
There should be a period after the word "questions", seeing as how there is proper punctuation on the first line of that paragraph.
Also, the word "and" being used twice doesn't look right..perhaps it could say: Please feel free to browse the site and learn more about Shawn and ShawnL Productions. E-mail us with any questions.
Even with that (points above) I don't think it sounds right enough... Sorry.
"Past Work" section:
I guess the names could be centered...or at least aligned so that they all begin at the same point but still align with the instruments being
played.refer to: Dan,Shawn,Mike)
Resume:
I like the fact that there is a PDF option of the resume so that it can be printed. I'm not sure if there is supposed to be any type of
punctuation in a resume...or if there's even a point in changing some of the grammar chosen.
Biography:
No comments on that one, everything seems to be alright!
So, yeah..you know me. I don't mean anything as an insult, it's all just comments/thoughts/suggestions.
Overall, I really like what you did with it. Congrats on yet another "tremendous" work of yours.
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posted on 2004-7-7 at 23:31
I got a DNS lookup failure trying to access that page...
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posted on 2004-7-8 at 01:08
Cool stuff man, im curious if you use dream weaver or flash to do that?? or something else?
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posted on 2004-7-8 at 01:55
rob, try again. i can't think why that would be.
marce, there's no Flash in that site. it was made in Dreamweaver. also used Fireworks, Photoshop and XaraX1.
and dez, the only bit i agreed on was the bit about the "period". oh, and i also agree about the PDF being a little sloppy, but
that's how it was provided to me, and i'm not getting paid to correct it, so i'm not gonna! the resume page, however, i was paid
for, so i did edit it there. it's not a simple case of copy and paste to put it back into a PDF, so i'm not about to spend my time sorting
it all out. sorry shawn. as for the "and", that is perfectly correct - "shawn and shawnl productions" is treated as one
object, then the sentance continues and another "and" is fine in my opinion. the names in the past work section - they are centered about
the dash seperating name and role. and i thought they looked silly dead centre. i liked it best like this, slightly indented, and still centered about
the dash.
thanks
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posted on 2004-7-8 at 01:57
you could always use a semicolon.
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posted on 2004-7-8 at 03:26
Yes,that could possibly work.
Oh,and Bart? Please don't feel like I was trying to put-down your site at all. It was merely a comment on my behalf. No offense was meant by it.
Sorry.
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posted on 2004-7-8 at 03:54
Hah. I was just there. I got the dude on msn and his named poped up with the site. He's a really cool guy and he was willing or actually is
willing to work with us on our future demos.
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posted on 2004-7-8 at 04:24
the site looks really good
and on another note, that song on there "In Dreams", is there anywhere to get full version? its got Jeremy Hernandez singing and its just
an all around good song, from what i could tell from the 30 second snipit.
"What are you doing?" >.>
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posted on 2004-7-8 at 12:30
sweet work bart, it bodes well for the livid's new site.
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posted on 2004-7-8 at 17:42
quotation:Originally posted by Eric
Hah. I was just there. I got the dude on msn and his named poped up with the site. He's a really cool guy and he was willing or actually is
willing to work with us on our future demos.
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posted on 2004-7-8 at 20:03
dez, i wasn't offended. but jenny has sent me a screenshot of her screen, and everything does look jumbled - the text is way too big on her
screen and i'm trying to fix it.
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posted on 2004-7-8 at 21:50
It looks like about a 16 size Verdana font on my screen.
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posted on 2004-7-8 at 21:56
can you post a screenshot of what you see? this is how it's meant to be, and this is what i see:
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posted on 2004-7-8 at 22:05
This is what I get:
Also, I am running IE 6.0
It looks like an error message from the web server.
[Edited on 8-7-04 by RobH]
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posted on 2004-7-8 at 23:19
what's wrong with the pdf? I can't see it. It shows up as a red box in the top left hand corner.
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posted on 2004-7-9 at 05:45
looks great to me bart.. everything works fine
How do you communicate those emotions that are so intense that no physical expression or series of words can even scratch the surface?
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posted on 2004-7-9 at 16:01
pdf works fine for me krista...
rob, a friend here in the UK told me he gets a DNS failure too, i'm gonna try to find out what's going on with that.
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posted on 2004-7-20 at 21:19
Bart, on the homepage, the text either runs off the screen or it appears over the picture. it's different every time... on my comp anyway.
but other than that it looks really good.
[Edited on 20-7-04 by armour_guitarist]
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posted on 2004-7-20 at 22:25
can you take screenshots? which browser?
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posted on 2004-7-21 at 17:23
ok it works fine on explorer, but on safari it first loads like the first pic, and then when i hit refresh it loads like the second pic.
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posted on 2004-7-21 at 20:57
i can see your pictures, they're uploaded but not showing for some reason. i'm trying to find out why.
it shouldn't look like either of those screenshots. i'll see what i can do to fix it.
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posted on 2004-7-21 at 21:57
My browser can't even find the page anymore.
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posted on 2004-7-21 at 22:18
you said it wouldn't load earlier rob - did it fix itself and then break again, or have you never been able to see it?
ian, have another look now, i changed the format a little. can you also take a screenshot of the past works page?
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posted on 2004-7-23 at 02:12
I have never seen the page working. Originally I got the above mentioned error, now I am getting a standard page not found error, as shown in the
attachment.
I have Apache installed on my computer... The original message I was getting looked like an Apache error. I was having some problems with Apache
before, which I have since fixed. Once I fixed those, I stopped getting the original error, and am now getting the new error.
I don't know if this is just a coincidence, but maybe the two issues are related.
